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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are many people who believe that all teenagers have to take apart in the summer camp
for
Suggestion
of
 their spare
time
 which can be helpful for their society. They
also
 feel that in general, these materials have played a crucial role on their personality. Despite of
this
 idea, I personally disagree with
this
 notion,
hence
 reasons will be analysed in
this
 article. In my opinion, it could be a misconception about students and teenagers which are obliged to do an an unpaid job in the summer.
First
 of all, they should have the opportunity to do whatever they want in life.
However
, if they forced, it may affect on the outcome of their job, because they have done something which they are not eager to do it.
Secondly
, when students and teenagers attend to school, they have a hectic curriculum which means they do not have adequate
time
 to refresh their mind and peruse on their interest hobbies.
Finally
, with these situations, if we force them, we will kill their free
time
. My idea varies widely with
this
 notion which these obligations would be beneficial both for teenagers and their community.
Firstly
, by following their ideas, students are forced to do things that are against their will. So
as a result
, they cannot do their best in their work and after a while they will figure out that they have just wasted their
time
 by doing these unpaid jobs.
Therefore
, it would not have an impact on their personality.
In addition
, if they are forced, we will increase the number of people who are depressed or have a lot of problems in their lives.
For instance
, some researches on some students in the UK indicate that those students which had gone to the summer camp, had a number of issues related to their society after that work. In conclusion, while teenagers may choose to work for free in their spare
time
, I believe that we should not make
this
 compulsory.
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