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All children should study a forging language in school, starting in the earliest grades. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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No one can ignore the importance to speak foreign languages these days. Especially, when the world has become as a small village by
developed
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developing
 technology. That mean people need to communicate with each other.
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, we cannot neglect
children ability
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the child's ability
child's ability
children's ability
 to learn
new
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a new language
new languages
language
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. The communication appliances have been developed that make individuals can connect each other very easy and
quickly
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quick
 in any place
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in
 the world because that people need to learn
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language
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a language
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from
 each other. Many people use social media
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every day
 and meet friends from different countries and talk together several hours by speech or write.
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, more of individuals have bought personal stuff from
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the website
a website
 which means they might use different
language
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 if they use international website.
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, there is global demand to share science and knowledge. Any person
dials
a particular instance of buying or selling
deals
 with kids know that children can earn skills and information easier than older people. Children tend to act and speak as their teacher, so when they study a new
language
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, they will be
earned
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earning
 it as a native speaker. Especially, if the children learn
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a new language
new languages
language
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, in
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the primary stage
 in school. Human in
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the childhood phase
 doesn’t have any responsibilities, so
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the child
 has enough time to learn
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new skills
a new skill
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 as
new
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a new language
new languages
language
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. I totally agree that children have to learn foreign
language
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 in earlier stages of school because they can absorb new
language
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 and speak it very well.
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, the communication between people from different countries become
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the main demand
 while the technology revolution.
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