There is a problem related with the changing room of your gym in your community. You reported it several times, but it was not solved. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter, you should: • describe the problem • what they said while reporting the problem • what you want the manager to do.

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Dear Mr Stephen, I am writing

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letter to inform you that I am regularly using the gym and the experience of the changing

room

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is completely disappointing because of a few problems. The main problem is related to

the

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apply

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hygiene and cleanliness. Changing rooms are dirty as people do not keep their used clothes in the designated area. Due to

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reason,

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area is full of bad odour and it's unbearable to stand in the changing

room

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, the condition of the lockers is not so good, most of them are broken and the ones which are working are

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not in a good condition. I have reported

about

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these problem

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in the complaint section,

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week. The person who

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the complaint

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told me that it is the fault of people who are not using the changing area as they do not follow the guidelines.

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, regarding the

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he told me

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can be fixed only by

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month as there are other issues which are on priority. I would like to give you suggestions to improve the condition.

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, strict rules should be implemented for the changing

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and heavy

penalty

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or punishment should be implied on the people who will break the rule. Regarding cleaning, multiple

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cleaning should be done for the changing

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in order to maintain hygiene and cleanliness. Yours faithfully, Davis

JskwlMon Jun 22 2020

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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231 words

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