Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. films stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, entertainment is more significant for life, and it is argued that entertainers
such
as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much salary. In my opinion, I agree and
also
disagree with/partly agree with
this
viewpoint. I do not concur with
this
angle because of- some reasons below.
First
of all, film stars, pop musicians and sports stars are occupations, entertainers genuine spend their time, money and health to practice and raise their ability to make many goods and services for public or audiences.
Therefore
, it is suitable for them to receive a lot of wage.
Secondly
, artistic talent is really rare and there is a small number of people who can create special art goods or art services for audiences. If you have a special good, you absolutely can sell it with a high price. These arguments given above can be seen as opposite perspective in equal measure.
To begin
with, some entertainers whose goods or services are not really good, but their salaries, which they receive from their audiences are very high.
For instance
, there are some singers whose voices are bad in Vietnam recently, but they have had some scandals and public are interested in them, so they have paid a large amount of salary to see and hear these singers singing.
On the other hand
, some jobs
such
as - engineers, researchers- need abundant time, knowledge and various work experiences do these jobs, but they have been paid much far less payment than entertainers. In conclusion, I do concur and
also
do disagree with the perspective that entertainers are paid too much money.
Submitted by Trinh Vuong on

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