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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent to do you agree?

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For the past few decades,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 has become incredibly popular and accessible, and there is a strong view that if a person goes abroad, he or she has to follow the local rules. Personally, I believe
that is
 totally correct statement
.
Accept space
.
 People show their respect when they accept a foreign
country's
Suggestion
country
 lifestyle. Different nations have their own rules and if a newcomer shows that he or she is ready to adapt,
then
 that person will be treated well.
For example
, in Indonesia, it is crucial for a woman to cover her head in holly places or churches, and when a guest of that
country
do not do
Suggestion
does not do
 that,
then
 it might have some alarming consequences.
Moreover
, it is easier to find a friend in a new place, when a
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
 is able to follow the patterns of a culture, more local citizens will be
wealling
disposed or inclined toward
willing
 to help him or her.
As a result
, a visitor will have an amazing experience. In order to live in another
country
, people have to deal with local customs. Indeed, when a person makes
such
 vital decision as moving abroad, he or she
have
Suggestion
has
 to be ready to deal with new traditions.
For example
, if somebody wants to relocate to Canada, they have to be familiar with health insurance system and general rules,
otherwise
, that will not be possible to remain in that
country
. On top of that, people may face some inappropriate consequences,
such
 as impossibility to find a job or meet new friends. In conclusion, if people adapt to new rules and traditions, they show their respect,
additionally
, he or she has more chances to find nice people, that
thay
people in general
they
that
day
 may have
close relationship
Suggestion
a close relationship
 with.
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