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People born today can expect to live longer than people in previous generations. What are some of the positive and negative implications of this phenomenon? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #generations #implications #phenomenon
In
this
technoloigically
by means of technology
technologically
technological
 advance world, people can have longer
life
 span than people of
the earlier
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earlier
 generations. The pros and cons of
this
 situation are undeniable.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss the positive effect of
this
 situation and
then
 followed by few negative
effect
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effects
. Longevity is a tool in the case of people who are serving
to
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in
society
. To be more precise, there are people who are doing something good for
society
, it would be
phenonmenal
of or relating to a phenomenon
phenomenal
 if they live a long
life
 and serve for a longer period. There are people who lost
there
of them or themselves
their
life
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lives
 at
young age
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a young age
 before their eureka moment.
For example
, as mentioned in an academic research done
in
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at
 Cambridge University, thirty per cent of the great legends died at a young age when they could have done more for
society
 if they lived longer.
On the other hand
, longer
life
 span can lead to a shortage of necessary resources: food, minerals and water. What I mean is, there can be an acute shortage of the natural resources if people keep on taking birth and not dying for a long period of time. The rate of population growth will keep on increasing if the mortality rate
keep
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keeps
 on decreasing. The non-sustainable use of the natural resources due to demand will lead to poverty. To illustrate, according to an article in The Times, world population has increased
two-fold
twice as great or many
twofold
tenfold
 in the
last
 decade, which is leading to an increase in the poverty. In conclusion,
although
longer
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the longer life span
life
 span can help the people who are serving
nation
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the nation
 and doing good for
society
, it will lead to a shortage of vital resources. As population will keep on increasing and sustainable use of resources is not possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • seasoned workforce
  • health advancements
  • chronic conditions
  • social welfare systems
  • pension plans
  • policy adjustments
  • aging population
  • cultural experiences
  • loneliness
  • mental health
  • geriatric care
  • consumption of resources
  • environmental stresses
  • climate change
  • resource depletion
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