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Nowadays,many people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes of this? What are the effects of this on individuals and the society?

#people #time #home #effects #individuals #society
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One of the controversial
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 the best academic results are more crucial than rewarding students who
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 improvements.In my opinion, students who
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 their great effort in their improvements are more worthy to receive the rewards. We have every reason to believe that students who
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 poorer educational results than the others may have mental illness.
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 is because people might make them feel like they don’t appreciate their effort or ignore their improvement by not paying attention to them.Those students would feel like they weren’t important to other people.It would cause those students
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have
dangerous mental illness
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a dangerous mental illness
 like anxiety
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depression and may eventually
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lead
 them to negative solutions to solve their sadness.
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giving rewards to the students would help them to feel like they have earned the respect and become more self-confident. One thing which is equally important is that
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the rewards
 can encourage the students to overcome their fear of studying and give them a good launch to develop their abilities.In order to become intellectuals
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students with poor educational results need encouragements.
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The rewards
 are very useful to encourage them because of the benefits it brings in many different aspects.When those students get their gifts for the improvements
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they will try to obtain them by striving harder
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 time.By applying that method
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students can get better improvements and
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 more positive attitudes toward their
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the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
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. In conclusion
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students who
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 improvements should have the rewards because of the important outcomes it may
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bring
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 might help them to become better students in the future.
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