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Band 4.5

Discuss how living in a city and living in a village differ from each other.

As
City
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 and Countryside both have their pros and cons, it totally depends on the personal choice of interest and what kind of lifestyle people require. I personally have the experience of both so I would like to discuss it in the following passages.
Firstly
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, due to technological advancement, the pace of life becomes very fast and eventually people are more prone to migrate towards the
city
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 from
villages
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the villages
. As all kinds of facilities
is
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are
 available in cities, people prefer to live there.
Secondly
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, education and medical facilities are easily available in the
city
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 and recreational facilities are easily accessible. As in the modern era, the new generation demands multiple ways of entertainment which is not so available in villages as far as technology is concerned. Some talents are only taken into account if they are identified and
the young
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younger
the younger
 generation gets a chance of recognizing
this
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 in cities as multiple activities and competitions take place.
For instance
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, I was in search of improving my skills in Graphic Design and due to
unavailibility
the quality of not being available when needed
unavailability
 of any coaching centre in my village, it led me migrate towards the
city
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.
On the other hand
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, living in villages has many positive points.
First
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 and foremost is that it has a pollution free environment.
Moreover
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, People live there are less prone to diseases.
In addition
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 to it, natural things are easily available. As farming is their main source of income, The government
also
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 provides some relief funds
to
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for
 them. The lifestyle of
localites
a surrounding or nearby region
localities
 is so simple and they do not expect much from their lives. As every coin has two sides, the living standards of both
city
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 and village has their advantages and disadvantages if compared with each other. But living in the
city
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 is more preferable and suggested according to the modern world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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