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Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #men #women
Some people argue that
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 men are naturally more competitive than
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women. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement, because both are equally based on their competitive capabilities.
Firstly
, experts
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revealed that
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 males
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 more talented than
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females
 in
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earlier times. But, for the
last
 ten decades, it has changed quite a lot and now many
females
 are playing an important role model in
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society.
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 days,
females
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 positive way.
For example
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Females
 play important
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 in the political parties and
also
 hold the highest positions in the leading companies.
Moreover
, they have even ruled the countries as presidents, so now
females
 push their limitations to
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higher levels with the ultimate dedication and
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hard work.
Secondly
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then
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females
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 capable
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 their
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 including
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family
life
, working
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social
life
. So they do not only stick to
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one task, but they do have
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 to do several tasks at once. So, that's why these people are
also
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To conclude
this
, It can be said that, males and
females
 are important for the development
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 a country. Regardless to say that,
females
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 service to the country and they are highly competitive like the males. So, both are considered as competitive individuals in the society.
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