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Success is only a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#success #luck
Opinions are mixed regarding whether luck is the primary determinant of
success
 in achieving targets. I am firmly of the belief that
success
 requires beyond luck. On the one hand, there are some other factors which can be attributed to the attainment of one’s goals.
First
 of all, I advocate the notion that the role of being determined is more significant than fortune. Once one actually realises the necessity to force themselves into doing
such
 things, they have already gained their persistence and passion, which,
moreover
, leads to their diligence and industrious attitudes towards their targets.
Secondly
, some other elements, namely appearance, social relationships and money can
also
 be considered as the keys to
success
. We are now living in a fast-paced world where
first
 impressions always have an indispensable role to play, especially for those who are in their thirties and above, since these would probably have significant impacts on working environments.
For instance
, for some certain types of careers, namely those who are celebrities, in order to pursue their passions, it is obviously essential to create and represent their best images to the audiences.
On the other hand
, the element of fortune is necessary.
Firstly
, one’s emotions would certainly influence their performance.
For example
, whenever someone is in a good mood, things result in far better conditions, but when things go unexpectedly, one can let themselves down unconsciously.
Furthermore
, nothing in
this
 world is completely fair as there are plenty of errors or misunderstandings that actually exist. These would affect a quite great number of situations that people are in, and they are, indeed, unavoidable. To summarise, though luck is considered to be a factor that contributes to
success
, there are some other elements which can
also
 decide the paths to one’s achievement.
Submitted by Tang Phuong on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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