Nowadays young people spend too much of their time in shopping mall. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

It
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It's
often argued that Expending as well much
time
in
shopping center
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a shopping centre
shopping centre
the shopping centre
shopping centres
is
setbacks
structure where a wall or building narrows abruptly
set-back
on youthful individuals. I completely agree with
this
that will make a youngster to be a aimless person as well as
a
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an
unbearable burden turning them into unemployment in the society. Passing maximum
time
in shopping area
offer
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offers
a
life
in a devastating way which indicates a aimless
life
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
the absence of right destination. It is high
time
to study hard for the youthful one to shape a secured
life
by setting up a
dreamy
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dream
destination. For
examaple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
examples
, Dr Mohammad Yonuse, noble holder in peace, is a successful man by fixing
a
Suggestion
an
achievable goal in the beginning of
life
was impossible wasting
time
in
shopping mall
Suggestion
a shopping mall
the shopping mall
a big
time
.
Secondly
, In case of losing valuable
time
to walk here and there and making a
life
without qualification are unable to get a good job to lead a happy
life
.
As a result
, ultimately they are being unemployments are shown
a
Suggestion
an
extra burden for any society.
On the other hand
, several individuals think that timing in a shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
is a great source to acquire a vast knowledge from the reality
wiill
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
well
help them in the critical moments
that is
totally impossible in absence of passing
time
in
shopping area
Suggestion
the shopping area
a shopping area
. That's why There is no alternative way
lo
(astrology) a person who is born while the sun is in Leo
Leo
lead a
life
very smoothly and successfully without gaining practical knowledge. To conclude, In the culminating
points
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point
that spending
time
in shopping mall may gain little
knowledge
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Knowledge
to lead a
life but
Accept comma addition
life, but
I believe that to avoid wasting
time
in
shopping mall
Suggestion
a shopping mall
the shopping mall
is a key to succeed in
life
.
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