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Some suggest that young people should take a job between school and the university. Discuss what advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

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Many people think that who has just finished high
school
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 studies should find work before they go to university. In my point of view,
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 idea has many benefits for students, but there are
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 drawbacks to be considered. The advantages of employment, work experience
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 one of the important basics that young people should have. Having a job after graduation from
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 will help them to mature and teaches them to live on their own.
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, jobs teach real-life skills
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 as working with other people, managing time and handling money.
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, there are some disadvantages to
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.
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, you may not
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 the major you want to take because you have been discontinued for years and it is a priority for new graduates.
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, too long being in a profession will reduce their wish to continue their study to a higher degree.
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, people who take a degree in university after years leave the
school
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 for the job, have a bigger possibility to face some problems when they back for study. They tend to forget the basic knowledge which had been taught in
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, so they will find it more difficult to learn. In conclusion, the disadvantages of working between
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 and college far outweigh the benefits. It is justified to say that takes a job for a few years between
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 and university will create some lacks, as it would reduce young people's spirit to continue their studies and make it more difficult for them to back for learning after leaving the
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 for years.
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, work skill is needed as an important qualification to live on their own.

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