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Some people suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

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In the present ago some people say that students should join to
job
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 before continuing
further
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 in
university
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. While others disagree,
this
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 trend, saying that it has a dagger in the students academic
study
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. More students left their
study
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 to get a
job
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.
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, taking a
job
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 for a period of time just before
university
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 has advantages and disadvantages.So, in
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 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am going to explain the different views on taking young people a
job
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 for a few years between school and
university
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.There are two sides of the discussion. There are many advantages to take a
job
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 before
university
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.
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firstly
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Firstly
, the students that
work
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 at places they want to
study
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 after, will be more experienced at
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 field. They will get more experiences and skills to help them in
study
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. Their scores will be higher. A
second
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 advantage is financial factor, as same students are not able to pay for
university
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.So they will get enough
money
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 to complete their
study
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 from the saved
money
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 from
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job
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the job
a job
. They
also
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 will be more careful about the
money
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 they gained.
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, the students who
work
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 before
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university
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the university
 will have self-confidence, independence and better social skills.
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, there are definite disadvantages to take a
job
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 before
university
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 at that important age. The
first
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, young people may end up their
study
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 and never going back to
university
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. They will enjoy their
work
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 life and decide to continue on that side. A
second
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 disadvantage, students may forget what they learn. They may lose the habits of good
study
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. They will be involved in
work
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 market and let
study
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 forever. In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages to take a
job
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 between school and
university
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.On one hand, taking a
job
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 is full of experience, skills and enjoyment.
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on
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On
 the other hand it has some dangers luckily and many people have the choice of whether they get a
job
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.If not, there are holidays to
work
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 on and gain some experience and
money
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 in the sometime.
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