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Some people suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

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In the present ago some people say that students should join to
job
 before continuing
further
 in
university
. While others disagree,
this
 trend, saying that it has a dagger in the students academic
study
. More students left their
study
 to get a
job
.
However
, taking a
job
 for a period of time just before
university
 has advantages and disadvantages.So, in
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am going to explain the different views on taking young people a
job
 for a few years between school and
university
.There are two sides of the discussion. There are many advantages to take a
job
 before
university
.
firstly
Suggestion
Firstly
, the students that
work
 at places they want to
study
 after, will be more experienced at
this
 field. They will get more experiences and skills to help them in
study
. Their scores will be higher. A
second
 advantage is financial factor, as same students are not able to pay for
university
.So they will get enough
money
 to complete their
study
 from the saved
money
 from
job
Suggestion
the job
a job
. They
also
 will be more careful about the
money
 they gained.
Finally
, the students who
work
 before
university
Suggestion
the university
 will have self-confidence, independence and better social skills.
However
, there are definite disadvantages to take a
job
 before
university
 at that important age. The
first
, young people may end up their
study
 and never going back to
university
. They will enjoy their
work
 life and decide to continue on that side. A
second
 disadvantage, students may forget what they learn. They may lose the habits of good
study
. They will be involved in
work
 market and let
study
 forever. In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages to take a
job
 between school and
university
.On one hand, taking a
job
 is full of experience, skills and enjoyment.
on
Suggestion
On
 the other hand it has some dangers luckily and many people have the choice of whether they get a
job
.If not, there are holidays to
work
 on and gain some experience and
money
 in the sometime.
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