Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Living a healthy life and getting the required nutrition is one of the most important aspect of one's life.
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, whose responsibility is it to maintain our health? There is an argument whether the ownership lies to oneself, or it is the
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who will take care of
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. I believe that its onto oneself to take of themselves, let us discuss both sides of
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argument. It's a well said phrase 'You can lead a horse to water, but you can’t make it drink' which essentially applies as even if the
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tries
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
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best to make us eat better and take care of our health, it's no good if we don't follow it. In our daily lives, we come across several choices as our meal options and it is we who may choose to eat healthy or the high-fat, high-sugar meal.
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, when I go out to eat, I try to go for salads or pasta, rather than a burger or fries. As they say freedom comes with responsibility, the choices are available but its up to us to make wise decisions.
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, it is
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the duty of the
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to ensure the food that its citizens consume is healthy. It can proactively do that by ensuring healthy foods like fruits and vegetable are easily accessible and cheaper
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needs to ensure proper communication,
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, bacon should have a proper label making its high fat and
cholestrol
an animal sterol that is normally synthesized by the liver; the most abundant steroid in animal tissues
cholesterol
content easily evident. States need to make it a priority that its citizens consume a healthy diet and remain fit. Conclusively, the importance of being fit and consuming healthy cannot be overstated. Though the
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plays an important role in ensuring the availability of healthier options and proper communication, it is upon us to pick wisely what we put in our mouths as our health depends on it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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