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Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Modern day
technology
 is revolutionizing our life day by day. In
this
 era of
technology
 e - books are becoming our primary source of education. There are some people who think that electronics will completely replace our conventional source of information. But
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think e learning may become
primary source
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the primary source
a primary source
 of
information but
Accept comma addition
information, but
 it will not completely replace newspapers.
Firstly
, with the
help of
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help of technology, it
technology
 it is possible to access books in our pocket and whenever and
whereever
where in the world
wherever
where ever
 we can easily read books.
Furthermore
, you
donot
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do not
 need to go to a library or a
book store
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bookstore
 to
purchases
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purchase
 a book. All the information is available with just one click away.
Besides
 that, many news companies like CNN and BCC have opened their online websites and mobile applications, so that people can always stay update to date.
Never the less
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Nevertheless
,
online market
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the online market
 is expanding at
high rate but
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a high rate, but
a high rate but
 it has some
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
.
Secondly
, not everyone likes to read articles on the gadgets and devices, they find it uncomfortable. They believe that computed
emit
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emitted
 radiation that causes harm to eyes and can
also
 damage
nervous system
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the nervous system
. For
instances
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instance
, research conducted by University of T Toronto
indicate
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indicates
 that the 70% of senior citizen prefer magazines over ebooks.
Moreover
, these devices need internet to operate and not all countries have
acess
the right to enter
access
 to
internet
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the internet
. Some
develping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
 countries still lack
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
 to support
such
 things. In conclusion,
although
 it is true that the number of electronic books and news has increased considerably in the recent years, but the existence of the
hardcopy
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hard copy
 version will be irreplaceable. As some people do not feel comfortable in reading an article directly from the computer screen, and others who live in the countryside might not have the access to the
technology
.
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