It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of old people that that of young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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One of the rising tendency nowadays is that elders accounting for a higher percentage,
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the lowers figures for youngsters in many countries. From my perspective, I believe that
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trend has more negative effects that could cause
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problems and economic stagnation. In terms of
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, the primary issues confronting countries with a large proportion of older adults would be the cost of providing the Public Health Service. The more people in the older group, the more
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problems authorities have to deal with.
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, governments have to impose spending cuts or raise taxes on income in order to provide funding for increasing health care. In countries like the USA and UK, elderly individuals
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take out private health insurance as they are afraid that welfare states are inadequate to guarantee good health care when they are old. From the perspective of the economy, an aging population can
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be understood as the shrinking number of people in working age and labour shortage. The national economy always depends on the stabilize workforce that increasing its GDP year by year. Insufficient working labour could be a threat that creates social-economic problems and economic stagnation. Nowadays, in many developed countries with aging populations has enacted policies to attract youngsters from other countries studying and working in their countries.
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, developing countries
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encourage their citizens to get married earlier. A good illustration is Vietnam, which has recently implemented a policy that brings more interest to adults marrying before the age of 30 and give birth to two children. In conclusion, I reiterate my strong view that an aging population creates severe problems to the national
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system and economy.
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