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In the past, museums stored information about culture and history, nowadays this information can be found through the internet and, therefore, there is no need for museums. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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The museum
 is the best place to experience the ancient things. It enables people finding information about history and culture. Due to the growth of the technology, it is easier for people nowadays to find information regarding past and culture from all over the world by surfing the internet. It makes
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 are no longer needed. I completely disagree with that assumption, and in
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 of all, a
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 provides a lot of real ancient things so that we could feel the sense of past time.
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, by visiting it, we are able to see what remains from the past.
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 experience cannot be felt, if we only see them on the screen.
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, at the certain gallery, we can see the dinosaur skeleton for real, while on the internet we could see only the picture. We will not be able to imagine how big it is and how the details will amuse us. Needless to say, visiting a
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 gives a deep satisfaction.
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, a
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 is a great way to keep our heritage as a prove that it is a part of our journey of becoming what we are now. A history cannot be repeated,
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 it is important for people in present days keep the legacy or what remain of it.
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, a state gallery telling a story about the independence process through a series of old painting made by a well-know portraitist. It shows how the state appreciates the past and
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 people who was taking his/her part to enshrine it into a picture. In conclusion, we as people who live now should maintenance the existence of
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museum
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the museum
a museum
, because it teaches us the stories about the past in an amazing way and as an honour to the history itself.
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