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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In recent
time
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times
, there has been a sharp rise in the road accident counts.
Although
, the best way to increase road safety is by minimising the number of vehicles, a few believe that some different better methods should be implemented. In recent
time
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times
, owing to, more usage of private cars the road traffic has risen up drastically leading to more accidents.
Hence
, by decreasing car counts on the roads can help reduce the crowds. Due to
this
, roads will be more spacious leading to drivers driving more safely. There are several ways to reduce vehicular traffic like developing more efficient public transports, using car pull for going to the same destination.
For example
, in Delhi 'odd-even' system is adopted in which only odd number plate cars can be used on one day and even on the other.
On the other hand
, people argue that there are many other better ways to reduce accidents.
This
 includes, ways like making lanes more broader and implementing strict laws and fines for breaking rules while driving, public awareness programs and many more.
Although
, these can
also
 be used to improve safety on roads, but these
is easier said
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are easier said
is easier said
 than done because
this
 needs co-ordination between people from all the class which, is
next
 to impossible.
Also
, often these methods take a lot of
time
 to get visible results.
Therefore
, in my opinion for fast results both
this
plural of "this"
these
 ways should to use together. As, it is not possible to convince everyone for following rules and
also
, as its
time
 consuming there is a need that both the possible ways must be used in order to get a noticeable decline in accidents. To summarize, by reducing vehicle counts a sudden change can be
achieved while,
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achieved, while
 other methods can be used to along with it to get a more effective outcome.
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