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Sending space crafts and astronauts into space is very expensive. It would be of greater value for the government to use the money spent on space exploration to improve the quality of life on Earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there is a great concern regarding
space
 exploration.
This
 problem demands more and more attention because lots of people claim it would be better to use tons of money spent on
space
 to enhance life on the Earth. I would argue, as I think that explorations can give us lots of opportunities to solve global problems.
Firstly
, we can confront
such
 global issues as overpopulation and pollution. It is a fact that fossil fuels harm our planet and putting some solar panels into the
space
 may provide us with a new safe sort of energy.
Moreover
, with new discoveries humanity will be closer to an ability to voyage beyond the outer realms of our solar system and in future they can even live there. That will definitely help to withstand overpopulation.
That is
 why spending
budget
 on
space
 is crucial and can put our lives forward in tier.
However
,
Accept space
,
space
 programs might seem as too costly venture. The ability of U.S.
budget
Suggestion
Budget
 could eradicate about 60% of the world’s hunger on its own. But are
space
 explorations taking people’s money? According to the latest researches conducted in 2019, estimated
U
spatially or metaphorically from a lower to a higher position
up
.S.
military
Suggestion
Military
 spending is $934 billion, whereas NASA has only been provided with $21.5 billion.
Hence
,
Accept space
,
there
are
Suggestion
is
 enough money to cover all necessary expenses.
Space
 programs can benefit humans a lot, due to the fact that
space industry
Suggestion
the space industry
 has a direct connection with the innovations driven. Computerized tomography can be a prime example of the
space
 industry’s legacy widely applied today to save lives.
That is
 why spendings on
space
 explorations are more important than on weapons which people cannot use upgrade their
life
Suggestion
lives
. On the other side, every country’s
budget
 needs a balance, so U.S.
should
Suggestion
Should
 make a simple shift of monetary resources. In conclusion,
space
 exploration is worthwhile as it helps to resist global challenges so it should be funded, but more holistic approach is needed for government
budget
 in order to impede
illogic
 spendings. Notwithstanding its cost,
space
 explorations are driving new information
that is
 crucial for human race and are highly likely to provide more avenues to address some pressing issues of today’s life.
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