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The only way to be successful in a business is being good at maths. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#business #maths
Cooperation demands proficiency in mathematics to be considered as a successful firm. I disagree with
this
 opinion because a company needs various skills as well as sufficient
market
 knowledge to become a well-known firm.
This
 essay will discuss reasons to support my idea. There are several factors for measuring a company status and rank it as a prosperous
one
Accept comma addition
one, hence
hence
, only maths cannot guarantee its fortune because intrinsic skills
such
 as hard-working, teamwork attitude as well as practical talents regarding the specific area of
company's concern
Suggestion
the company's concern
 are required. A successful supermarket chain in the UK,
for instance
,
described
Suggestion
Described
 their struggling journey throughout
years
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the years
 in a journal and mentioned that they have succeeded because of their staffs' hard-working and teamwork spirit.
Although
 accounting and mastering in maths required in
this
business
, it is certainly not the only key factor in succeeding them. Before establishing a
business
,
market
 knowledge should be deemed to minimize the risks and failures,
therefore
, just a specific talent seems not sufficient.
One
 of my friends,
for example
, started a small cafe several years ago and now it is known as
one
 of the most popular ones in the town.
This
 prosperity did not happen by relying on
one
 talent and they did ample
market
 research before starting
then
 found the
market
 gap. By recognizing the gap they could focus on their potential and bright points like forming a creative menu or decorating the shop in a way that could attract more customers. They
also
 predicted their target customer and managed to provide the best quality services. All in all, the idea of only concentrating on
one
 specific skill like maths to be recognized as a successful
business
 seems unrealistic since other skills and
market
 research can play crucial roles in a
business
 to lead it through prosperity.
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