Because many problems we face today affect our whole planet, good relationships between countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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I can easily find that especially the current situation of global is so complicated that anyone can't solve it right away. It is natural that there is no

country

which can live alone without being connected with other countries. From

this

point of view, it is understandable that some people insist that they should care only about benefits by keeping good relationships with other countries.

For example

, in my

country

, it seems that the

president

more cares Chinese than his nation's people keep good image to China. Of course, even in my

country

there are so many people who support him.

However

, not all the trying can bring great results. If one

president

tries to make good relationships with other countries, she or he must discard something for it, which can be suppressing her or his nation's desires. Recently, in my

country

, the

president

was blamed strongly by his people because he ignored what people had said and just pursed what he thought.

Finally

, not only he lost his fame as a

president but

Accept comma addition

president, but

also

he lost his good relationships with other countries because the result with other countries was ended badly. In conclusion, I think it is very important to keep balance between one

country

's desire and being connected with them well. If one situation is out of balance, the

country

can't

last

for a long time.

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