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Because many problems we face today affect our whole planet, good relationships between countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#face #planet #relationships #countries
I can easily find that especially the current situation of global is so complicated that anyone can't solve it right away. It is natural that there is no
country
 which can live alone without being connected with other countries. From
this
 point of view, it is understandable that some people insist that they should care only about benefits by keeping good relationships with other countries.
For example
, in my
country
, it seems that the
president
 more cares Chinese than his nation's people keep good image to China. Of course, even in my
country
 there are so many people who support him.
However
, not all the trying can bring great results. If one
president
 tries to make good relationships with other countries, she or he must discard something for it, which can be suppressing her or his nation's desires. Recently, in my
country
, the
president
 was blamed strongly by his people because he ignored what people had said and just pursed what he thought.
Finally
, not only he lost his fame as a
president but
Accept comma addition
president, but
also
 he lost his good relationships with other countries because the result with other countries was ended badly. In conclusion, I think it is very important to keep balance between one
country
's desire and being connected with them well. If one situation is out of balance, the
country
 can't
last
 for a long time.
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