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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Robert and I live in the university hostel. I am writing
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 am facing with the current system of accommodation. Under the present rules, I need to stay with another student. Since we both belong to complete different backgrounds and academic
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 in the university, there is little in common for both of us. These are creating some problems, which is
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 my work. Some of the issues,
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 am currently experiencing are frequent visits of his friends to the room causing disturbance, loud music from his computer
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 my concentration levels during my mathematics practice in the evening. I would be happy
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 If you change my accommodation to any other room, where
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 can live with a partner who has more similarities with me or a kind of
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 didn't to share with anyone. Thanking you for your attention
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 my concerns Yours faithfully, Robert
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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