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Public libraries will soon no longer be housed in a building as all facilities and books will be available online for all to access. Do the advantage of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

It is argued that with the easy availability of the internet
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huge infrastructure of traditional
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 will be substituted by online
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. While I accept that
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 development has some drawbacks, I believe that the benefits do outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand online
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 has some detrimental impacts
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, online libraries can not reproduce the environment of traditional libraries. To illustrate, when people are in a quiet environment where everyone is reading people will
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 be motivated to their reading done
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 impossible if they stay at home.
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 many people find reading printed material to be easier than reading material on a computer screen.
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, in many developing
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countries
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there are numerous of people do not have the access to the internet
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In spite of the disadvantages mentioned above, there are two main advantages possessed by online
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, electronic books are easily accessible anytime and anywhere, compared to a particular place of traditional libraries. The user of a digital
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 need not to go to the
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 physically, people from all over the world could gain access to the same information, as long as an Internet connection is available.
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, if traditional libraries are replaced by virtual libraries their spaces can be used to build
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 homes for the numerous homeless to live. In conclusion,
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 online
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 cannot provide the same environment as the traditional
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, its reduction of physical boundary and time made the benefits weighed against the drawbacks.

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