due to increasing density of living areas in a city,most residents are suffering from physical and social dangers.consequently, they are against living in the city. to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Topic: More and more wild
animals
are on the verge of
extinction
and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for
this
? What can be done to solve
this
problem
.
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A wide range of wild
animals
are to disappear or have the risk of
extinction
in the near future. Some inevitable factors play an important role
on
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the elimination of
animals
. Some reasons why the risk of
extinction
grows are various, the most necessary one,
however
, is hunting
animals
by people for their valuable leather or parts of
body
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. Demand for natural
materials
of high quality increases today and people find
the
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solution
on
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hunting wild
animals
and using them for business purposes regarding
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of elephants,
leather
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the leather
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of tigers, etc.
As a
result
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result,
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thousands of
animals
are killed by human beings. Luckily, the ways of solving
this
problem have been discussed for years and discussions have ended with several resolutions which might reduce the hunting of
animals
. The best way to fix the problem would be the change of demand for
materials
of
animals
which means any companies or works should produce products without using
materials
of animal origin,
instead
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waste must be recycled and reused.
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, some solid
materials
might be used
on
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making some house decorations or kitchen
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, but not
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the horns of some
animals
that are durable and resilient for conditions.
Consequently
, hunters will not find
partner
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to sell their
materials
and kill
animals
, as well.
Therefore
, the process may turn back to the positive way that
risk
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of animal
extinction
will stop soon. In conclusion, there are many kinds of solutions
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this
circumstance,
however
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my point is the most significant one among them.
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  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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