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An increasing people thinks that the
car
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 is the main private transport for the city society.
This
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 essay will examine several issues that could be appeared by using
this
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 kind of
transportation
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 and a possible solution that can be applied to
this
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 issue. One of the major problems that can appear by using a private
car
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 is a high
traffic
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rate
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, which can lead to another problem, raising the concentration of particulate matters in the air. A high
traffic
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rate
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 is the main problem faced by a city society. A City usually has a massive volume of the private
car
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 while sometimes the
rate
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 of
car
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 user is higher than the
rate
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 of new road construction.
As a result
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, the road could not maintain all the cars in one go which can cause a high
traffic
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rate
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.
For instance
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, in developing countries
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 as Indonesia, the new road construction
rate
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 is lower than the
rate
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 of the
car
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 user and private transport user which make Indonesia became one of the most
traffic
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 countries in the world. Other than that, using cars massively can cause a high pollutant concentration relished on the air and it cannot be controlled. The particulate matter concentration and some greenhouse gases can be very high and it can cause respiratory issues, particularly for the pedestrians.
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, it has a bad impact on long term living.
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, the long term effect that we already experienced the small part of it is the depletion of the ozone layer by the greenhouse gases.
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, the possible solution to fix
this
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 problem is the improvement of the public
transportation
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 system by the local government.
In other words
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, public
transportation
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 needs to be improved so it can be more convenient, safe, comfortable and on time.
Besides
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 that, public
transportation
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 is using an LNG as a fuel source rather than gasoline, which is more environmentally friendly.
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, by using public
transportation
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, higher
traffic
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 rates and environmental degradation can be avoided. To sum up, high
traffic
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 rates and air pollution are the problems that can be appeared by using private
transportation
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such
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 as
car
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 and the possible solution to fix
this
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 is to use the public
transportation
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 provide by the local government.
Submitted by Nida Nafila on

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