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1.Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

#people #system #teachers #students #classroom #year
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Classroom learning
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The classroom learning method
method
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 is predicted to
gone
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go
 by 2050. I partially agree with that,
however
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, I believe the use of
physical classroom
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the physical classroom
 for learning will still exist in the future considering its importance in
education
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. Technology provides platforms where students and teachers could meet virtually without being in the same building. Studying process still could be done by face to face meeting using
internet
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the internet
 and certain application,
instead
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 of teachers and students come to
school
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.
For example
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, children who get illness can use zoom application, so that he/she could
following
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follow
 the class from home or hospital. Needless to say, technology
have
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has
a
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an
 amazing power
too
in the direction of
to
 change the learning
method
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.
On the other hand
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, it
also
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 will raise a question: are students get the best
education
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 through
this
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 new
method
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? Online learning cannot achieve a comprehensive result as what
school
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 could achieve. Students aiming for the improvement in knowledge and attitude, where they could learn it best from
school
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, through an intensive interaction with teachers and friends.
For instance
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, by having a direct interaction, children could feel a real affection which would affect their personal and academic
decelopment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
. It is possible for children to feel less happy and less motivated because they will not see or play with their
peer
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peers
.
Therefore
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, a
school
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existance
the activity of contributing to the fulfillment of a need or furtherance of an effort or purpose
assistance
 is crucial in term to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the
essentials
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essential
 goal of
education
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. In conclusion, the old and
new
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the new method
method
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are need
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is needed
is needing
needs
 to fill each other gap. Learning virtually could be
done
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 for certain purposes, yet the classroom still the main
education
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 media.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual reality
  • augmented reality
  • traditional teaching methods
  • personalized learning
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • global connectivity
  • online platforms
  • obsolete
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • digital classrooms
  • economic factors
  • maintaining physical school buildings
  • online learning environments
  • social interaction
  • practical learning experiences
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