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1. Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

#people #system #teachers #students #classroom #year
Classroom learning
Suggestion
The classroom learning method
method
 is predicted to
gone
Suggestion
go
 by 2050. I partially agree with that,
however
, I believe the use of
physical classroom
Suggestion
the physical classroom
 for learning will still exist in the future considering its importance in
education
. Technology provides platforms where students and teachers could meet virtually without being in the same building. Studying process still could be done by face to face meeting using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 and certain application,
instead
 of teachers and students come to
school
.
For example
, children who get illness can use zoom application, so that he/she could
following
Suggestion
follow
 the class from home or hospital. Needless to say, technology
have
Suggestion
has
a
Suggestion
an
 amazing power
too
in the direction of
to
 change the learning
method
.
On the other hand
, it
also
 will raise a question: are students get the best
education
 through
this
 new
method
? Online learning cannot achieve a comprehensive result as what
school
 could achieve. Students aiming for the improvement in knowledge and attitude, where they could learn it best from
school
, through an intensive interaction with teachers and friends.
For instance
, by having a direct interaction, children could feel a real affection which would affect their personal and academic
decelopment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
. It is possible for children to feel less happy and less motivated because they will not see or play with their
peer
Suggestion
peers
.
Therefore
, a
school
existance
the activity of contributing to the fulfillment of a need or furtherance of an effort or purpose
assistance
 is crucial in term to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the
essentials
Suggestion
essential
 goal of
education
. In conclusion, the old and
new
Suggestion
the new method
method
are need
Suggestion
is needed
is needing
needs
 to fill each other gap. Learning virtually could be
done
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 for certain purposes, yet the classroom still the main
education
 media.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual reality
  • augmented reality
  • traditional teaching methods
  • personalized learning
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • global connectivity
  • online platforms
  • obsolete
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • digital classrooms
  • economic factors
  • maintaining physical school buildings
  • online learning environments
  • social interaction
  • practical learning experiences
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