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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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Universities see a lower enrolment rate for the
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 subjects from across the world. The problem can be justified by two main reasons – fear of mathematics and fewer job opportunities. The field of
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 and mathematics are complementary to each other. One cannot study a
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 subject without a mathematical aptitude. Students all over the globe, fear numbers and mathematical concepts from a very tender age.
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 happens because there are a minuscule percentage of educators who understand numbers and are able to pass it on to the
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 generation. In most of the countries across the world, students are forced to memorize tables and formulae
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 of understanding and deriving them. Adding to the dilemma of the students is the outdated
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 courses which leave the students poorly skilled for the job market.
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, when I graduated from
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 after completing my Bachelor’s in Chemistry, maximum of the job opportunities available to me was that of becoming a teacher in high school. The impact of
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 disparity is that we see a very less number of students pursuing
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 as researchers or scientists. The society has lesser people with the scientific temperament who can lead to newer innovations and inventions.
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 in turn affects the overall development of the human evolution. In conclusion, fear of numbers and poorly designed
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 courses are discouraging the number of students to pursue
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 at the
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 level and take it up as a career.
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 is hampering the rate of technological advancement of the humankind.
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