Some people think that success is the best measure of intelligence whilst others think that intelligent can be measured in other ways What is your opinion?

It is a fact that we can easily find people who have superior
intelligence
also
succeeded in their career. So it is understandable that some people insist that there is a strong relation between
intelligence
and success.
However
, they should remember that there are numerous people who have great
intelligence but
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intelligence, but
failed to succeed,
also
there are tons of people who don'
t
have good
intelligence
but succeeded in their
job
. I think many factors made
this
situation. I will write down some factors I guess.
First
, unfortunately, today's society needs high degree, especially when it comes to getting their employees.
However
, those who were born in poor family usually can'
t
get many opportunities to be educated well, which makes huge gaps between those who are in a rich family. In my country,
this
is quite a serious problem and still it seems it can'
t
be solved soon.
For example
, kids whose parents are very rich usually go to a lot of academies after their school while kids whose parents are not going to a restaurant to do a part time
job
. Considering it is natural that more studying makes better grades, rich children are more likely to enter prestigious universities and succeed in getting a better
job
.
Second
, sometimes trying to hard defeat best
intelligence
. I know some people whose brain was not good, but they succeeded in a field which they want. Because they knew their
intelligence
was not that great, they just tried more rather than give up.
Third
, people have their own way, which means humans can'
t
do well in everything. If someone can find their own specific thing that they can show their ability and concentrate on their way,
then
they can easily succeed than those who couldn'
t
find their thing. I believe
this
is so important that
this
makes a huge difference, especially when they would like to have a
job
. In conclusion, since our society is very complicated, I think there are a lot of factors that decide people who succeed. So it might be too radical opinion to say that only
intelligence
determines success.
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