Many people believe that social media sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

#people #media #sites #facebook #impact #individuals #society

It is true that social media platforms

such

as Facebook and Twitter have become increasingly popular among people of different age groups.

However

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some people are concerned that they can exert negative influence on humanity as a whole.While

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accept that they do have several disadvantages

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believe there are more benefits than drawbacks. On the one hand

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it is understandable why people argue that social media sites have

adverse effect

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an adverse effect

on people.The primary reason is that individuals can easily become addicted to these applications and tend to spend too much time on them.A recent study in China found that people aged from 20 to 35 spend approximately 6.5 hours on social media applications each day on average.

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this

would not only affect their

study

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studies

and

work but

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work, but

also

does damage to their health both physically and mentally.

For example

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teenagers may become overly dependent on online communication

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which is

poor substitute

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a poor substitute

for interactions in real life and

therefore

alienate themselves from friends and families.

On the other hand

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contend that the advantages of those social media sites deserve more praise.

First

and foremost

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applications

such

as Facebook and Instagram now serve as the most convenient and effective tools for people to acquire information about current events.

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during

this

Covid-19 crisis

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Weibo

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which is the Chinese version of Facebook

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has been voted the most useful channel by

Chinese

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the Chinese

when it comes to obtaining both domestic and international news.Another benefit is that social media sites provide individuals access to a more

colorful

having striking color

colourful

and diverse world.There are many

influencers

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influences

who specialize in different kinds of fields and they share high-quality content of various categories for free

such

as make-up tutorials

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food recipe and useful tips on language learning.

Consequently

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we can learn a wide range of knowledge in an extremely convenient way. In conclusion

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although

social media platforms do have some downsides

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it seems to me that their disadvantages are outweighed by their advantages.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Many people believe that social media sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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