Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Physical
punishment
has become increasingly a serious problem among some families in society. Some people believe that corporal
punishment
is the best way to educate their children.
This
essay will discuss the reasons why corporal
punishment
is completely unacceptable. On the one hand, parents have always thought of various ways to discipline their children. They were probably taught as the same way when they were a child,
therefore
they might think that it would be the best education method to raise the children.
Furthermore
, most of parents
also
believe that self-discipline comes only from
physical body
Suggestion
the physical body
of a child
instead
of nourishing it routinely inside their own mindset,
hence
they easily chose to teach their children through spanking as much as possible. Indeed, If a father had educated by physical spanking from his grandfather, He would likely have risen his son by the same way. For these reasons, corporal
punishment
was extremely encouraged to discipline the children.
On the other hand
, In order to shape the children’s behaviour that does not mean that parents frequently teach their children by physical
punishment
. Psychologically, if a parent always chose to smack children day by day, their children will likely get some diseases related to mental illness, apparently because they extremely scare their parents when they might make some mistakes or doing something wrong unconsciously.
In other words
, when children were
suffered
Suggestion
suffering
from the smacking of their parents, they will not be able to develop both physically and psychologically. Overall, parents should seriously recognize the unexpected consequences of physical
punishment
.
This
essay argued why people chose smacking children is the only option to shape children’s behaviour. In my opinion, physical
punishment
is definitely not a well-educated method.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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