many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods

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It is generally acknowledged that producing more products and matter should be the main objective of each nation.
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, while I agree that the 
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of goods should be
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produced by a manufacturing process
made
by each
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for its people and
economic economy
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economic, economy
, but increasing the manufacturing manufactured products may not be the best goal. Meeting the needs of
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 citizens is one of the crucial duties for both countries and people a
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's government. The growing
production
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of products could guarantee the future of the
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with supplied materials;
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, it could be inconvenient for the
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as well. While the
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is producing more materials and goods, that it is using up its resources and energies energy. It is necessary for each
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to evaluate its people’s demands and the cost of manufacturing materials and products.
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, the point is that The costs for of manufacturing are either environmental or financial ones which and the costs have to be investigated before taking steps in
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the direction
a direction
to the to 
increaseing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
 
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. In my opinion,
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the
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of adequate and sufficient products is one of the main measures for stability in every
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, increasing the
production
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of goods may not be the best action to take.
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 Good management balances all aspects of people’s lives: providing a healthier environment, investing on in health care systems, establishing universities and schools, and 
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making, creating
making creating
 job opportunities for younger people all are necessities of a
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which have to be considered as important issues and goals, too. All in all, governments should allocate enough proportion of their countries’ budgets to manufacturing products in order to provide a good for economic growth.
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, countries’ economic and
people civilian
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people, civilian
 needs are required more more important than focusing on increasing the
productioning
the act or process of producing something
production
of materials and goods.

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