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Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by legalising all drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Illegal drugs have become a worldwide problem in modern day society. The trading of drugs is widespread in nearly all countries and the number of people consuming drugs worldwide is high. It has been suggested simply to legalise all recreational drugs to solve the problems associated with them. I personally agree partially with
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 proposal, because I can see many advantages, yet
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 many disadvantages. One positive aspect of legalising these drugs would be that the number of criminal activities committed to obtain them would decrease. Fewer people would
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 be imprisoned and have a criminal history that prevents them from progressing in life.
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, essential police resources would be freed up and devoted to other areas.
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, high taxes could be imposed on the legal product, allowing governments to have better resources to improve the infrastructure of their countries.
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 legalising all illegal drugs could result in several positive effects, there are many negative effects that could be possible.
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 of the legalisation, I personally believe that it would become acceptable to use drugs and people would no longer pay attention to the damage that drugs cause. Schools might no longer educate teenagers and adolescents about the negative effects drugs have on people, resulting in more teenagers experimenting with them, as they would believe that
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 is a normal aspect of life.
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 would result in a higher number of drug addicts and potentially in more deaths, because it would be easier to obtain a large amount of illegal drugs and
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 the chances of overdosing would
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 increase. In conclusion, I partially agree with the proposed action.
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, I think that an age restriction should be placed on drug use, as teenagers and adolescents could easily become addicted if all illegal drugs are legalised.
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 group of people is highly at risk of becoming addicted and potentially dying
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 of drug use and
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 should only be allowed to consume drugs after reaching a certain age.
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