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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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It goes undoubted that the historical buildings are too much important for the nation as a mine of gold. It is stated that by emerging society spending on repair of old buildings is wastage of money
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, build modern ones is
positive thing
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a positive thing
. I am quite the opposite of latter notion and going to explain my views in forthcoming crumbs of writing. There are deluge of reasons about saving the old buildings. The
first
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 and foremost one is that old buildings are signs of past periods.
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with the help of old buildings the upcoming generation can learn our historical background along with that if people will spend money on old buildings
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now,
then
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next population
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the next population
 will more careful about that
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thing
. Moving
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, new buildings always demand of huge amount of money and
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 need of a larger space, but, the Government can repair old buildings with spending few amount and save another part of other works.
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 it, historic buildings as a hub of tourist attraction and it's always boost country income. In
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 even the spending on old buildings have few demerits, but the merits are in large number.So people should support it.
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