Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

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In recent

times many

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times, many

people are suffering from

obesity

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which means

enormous increase

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an enormous increase

weight

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in a short period of time. In my opinion the main reason for

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type of disease is not having a proper food habits.

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proper food habits are

maintained

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maintained, then

then

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no people will suffer from

weight

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issues.

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Firstly people

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Firstly, people

not having a proper diet schedule will suffer from

this

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type of disease. Food with more fat content like meat

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sugar products are the main sources to cause

obesity

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. Not only the diet

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plan, but

also

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the daily exercise

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important. People who

drinks

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drink

are drinking

are drunk

have drunk

have been drinking

water more than needed

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effects to

over

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

overweight

weight

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which is not

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obesity

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obese

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example I

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example, I

know one person who is unconscious about his health

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he suddenly gains more

weight

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and

then

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he doesn't walk on its own

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doctor

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the doctor

a doctor

confirmed it as

obesity

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. The major effects of the

over

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

overweight

weight

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are mainly health issues

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as heart related problems, breathing problems

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Obese people don't stand on their own and they are not able to walk more distances.

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However it

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However, it

leads to get other diseases like sugar and kidney problems. Those persons who

has

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have

a problem with overweight

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also suffers

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also suffer

from digestion problems. They cannot do work on their own

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someone have to help them.

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obesity

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Obesity

is really a serious issue

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Finally I

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conclude that if the people change their food plans and do regular exercise gives them a lot of benefit. People having

weight

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gain in a very short period of time

has

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have

to consult

doctor

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a doctor

the doctor

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because it leads to more problems based on health.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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