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For some people, shopping is not just about buying what is necessary, but is a form of entertainment. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Shopping for people is not just a necessity, but
also
, a form of
entertainment
 for many. Middle-class people only buy products when it is required,
however
, the rich class does shopping for making themselves feel better.
This
 essay will discuss considering shopping as a positive or a negative
development
 among different individuals. Some people only buy products only when it is required and saves
money
 for the future. They know the value of their finances, as well the value of the items they are buying. Whereas, many human beings does shopping considering it as a source of
entertainment
. People who wander in fancy shopping malls, consider brands as one of the biggest social and class image, and the ones who can waste their
money
 on buying those products which are not even required just to make them feel good thinks that it is a positive
development
. In my opinion, purchasing products from the market unnecessarily can be useless and be a negative
development
 of the society. Shopping just for the sake of
entertainment
 can cause loss of valuable things to the poor people. People who can afford and waste their
money
 on
entertainment
 like shopping should definitely think about the people for whom it can be important. They should learn from the poor and build a habit of saving
money
 and use it only and when required. To conclude, shopping unnecessarily can create a shortage of items in the market for the needy and create loss of finances on irrelevant things.
Therefore
, higher class should avoid
this
 negative
development
 and start saving their
money
 for the rainy day or use it on to help the society.
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