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Universities should be concerned with educating people so that they have wide general knowledge and be able to , consider important matters from an informed viewpoint, and not simply prepare students for jobs required by society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Educational institutes should promote those courses which can give
overall a general
Suggestion
a general overall
 knowledge about everything, and not just for the sake of making them study for the same jobs required in the society. I partially agree with the statement,
therefore
this
 essay will discuss about the reasons for the same. Nowadays, universities promote those programs which are high in demand in the market and provide them huge tuition fees from the students.
For instance
, Bachelors in Technology in a country like India is very famous. Every
third
 person does the same course, whether from science or commerce background, only because it is trendy and was high in demand on some period.
Therefore
,
this
 resulted in
high number
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a high number
the high number
 of engineers in the market and only fewer number of engineering jobs leading to unemployment in the nation. If the colleges start encouraging their students to study those subjects which increases our general knowledge on
overall basis
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an overall basis
, the rate of unemployment will automatically decrease. As an individual, they will start understanding what is good and harmful for them. They will have a better prospective towards their life an
also
 create new opportunities for many other individuals.
This
 will result in building an educated society that helps them to grow in every sector. To conclude, if education
tp
the upper part of anything
top
to
 people is provided in the right direction, and not as a herd for any fancy job,
then
 not only an individual will benefit out of it, but
also
, he will help in creating a better society.
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