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Some cities create housing for growing populations by building dollar buildings why other cities have opted to build on wider areas of land. which solution is better?

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The number of population is increasing day by day and problem with accommodation is occurring due to
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. Some cities choose to build dollar buildings to solve
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 while, Others prefer to create houses in wider places. Let us discuss which is the best solution for a better understanding. On the one hand, many families can live in a single taller building. These types of buildings contain so many blocks and each floor is constructed in the way where lots of families can live under a single roof.
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, there are some disadvantages. Living with too many people in a single apartment can create noise pollution and people are unable to focus on the important work. Another problem can be faced with natural disasters.
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, At the time of earthquakes the whole building could demolish as well as people living in that could die.
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, Houses created in wider areas, means wasting
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having no definite form or distinct shape
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 space and only a single family can accommodate at these places.
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, in Canada, There are lots of cities where houses are constructed in a wider place with gardens and car parking areas and because of
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 only few people live there. But, The benefit side of
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 is that these places are pollution free and are well cleaned due to the less population. To conclude, after discussing both statements, I would say that constructing big buildings is a best solution to solve the problem with accommodation for rising number of people.
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 taller blocks should be built in a way that any disaster happens, it will not face any damage.
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