Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter •say how long you now want to rent the apartment for •explain why your plans have changed •tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

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Dear John, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to inform you officially that, I need to extend my house rent which I rented five months ago. As my initial agreement is near to end, I am interested in extending it for an additional six months. As you are already informed, I am staying in

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city for the purpose of an official training offered by my company. Suddenly, an important email I received from my office that, I have to attend a second session of training soon after finishing the current one.

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why, it is mandatory for me to stay for another six months here.

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matter has bounded me to change my decision and make corrections in my plan.

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, I should inform you of some problems in the apartment which must be addressed soon.

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, the main door lock does not work properly, sometimes I have to keep the door unlocked

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issue.

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, the shower

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gives some problems every time. It is my humble request to repair them at your earliest convenience. Thank you for your understanding and your quick response is highly appreciated. Yours sincerely, Shoaib Ahmed

Submitted by shafaeat.shoaib on Sun Jan 19 2025

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Coherence and Cohesion

Try to separate different concerns into distinct paragraphs for better clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance coherence.

Coherence and Cohesion

Consider using more transitional phrases to improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.

Task Achievement

The letter effectively addresses the main points: request for extension, reason for change in plans, and highlighting of a problem.

Task Achievement

The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is appropriate for a letter to a landlord.

Coherence and Cohesion

The closing of the letter is courteous, ensuring a positive impression.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

199 words

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