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Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? You spesific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Nowaday
Suggestion
Nowadays
, many young people prefer to live in a big
city
 to
persuit
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
 their own purposes of life. Others love living in a countryside to make the most of fresh air. As a young girl
,
Accept space
,
 I believe that living in a big
city
 can give me more chance to receive better education and a better means of entertainment.
Firstly
, living in a metropolitan
bring
Suggestion
brings
 us a great chance to access into a good education.
For instance
, in my isolated countryside, it always be a huge challenge for me to find out an
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
 as
noboday
a person of no influence
nobody
 really want to study a
forege
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 language. Whereas in Ha Noi which is
knowned
apprehended with certainty
known
 as a
mordern
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
city
 and
also
 the capital of Vietnam, it could be much easier to a pick out an English
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 near home so that we can spend a huge amount of time for
transfering
transfer somebody to a different position or location of work
transferring
 from home to the class. For me,
this
 is one of the
spendid
having great beauty and splendor
splendid
 advantages when live in
urban area
Suggestion
urban areas
an urban area
.
Secondly
, Inner
city
 where has been a perfect place for the youth to gather is
also
 be the best sites for entertainment in my country. People come here for bars
,
Accept space
,
 karaoke
,
Accept space
,
and all mean of entertainment. Here is
also
famost
widely known and esteemed
famous
 for a range of shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
 which is called a shopping paradise.
In
Suggestion
On
By
 the way come back home, I and my friends can call at a coffee shop for a while and gossip with each others so that we could release from stress after studying in a long time
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 school. In summary,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly believe that living in a big
city
 could give us the best chance for studying and entertaining.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
, metropolitan is convenience for medical treatment in the case that we get a disease and so much promised things......
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