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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people, want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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The education system has changed drastically in the past few years. There is a huge decrease in the number of people applying for the jobs in the teaching profession, especially, for high schools. In
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 as, in teaching profession, employees are paid less and are deprived of benefits as compared to other professions.
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, they have to deal with students between the age group of 13-19, who are not always easy to manage. In a research study carried out at Harvard University, hardly 12% of students in secondary schools listens to their teachers. Things like
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, adds up to the stress level of a person dealing with a variety of students,
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 affecting their physical and mental health. All these reasons
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 to the rising issue of the country. In most of the countries,
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 problem has already been acknowledged and governments have started taking initiatives in a proper manner. School organizations have now started giving away additional holidays to the teachers in order to balance out their mental health, if needed.
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, part time teachers are now encouraged to join the organization as a full time employee by providing them more incentives and highly paid salaries. In India, the government has declared to pay additional 12K rupees per annum to the teachers teaching between grade 8 to grade 12, in order to encourage people working in
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 profession. There should be strict rules or punishment for the teenagers not listening to the teacher in high school. To conclude that, though there are many challenges in education system for secondary schools, if initiatives are taken in a proper manner, all the troubles can be nailed down easily.
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, awareness among the individuals of the country will help a lot in building a bright future of the nation.
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