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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the present world we cannot refuse technology, which helps humans to travel or discover the new place or the place that nobody has never been or visited. It is often argued that visiting the new
environment
 that we have never gone which help humans to discover the new thing or open their mind. While some people believe that travelling or discovery the new
environment
as a result
 of living of local people.
Firstly
, there are many pros of the remote natural
environment
 in a new place that humans have never seen.
For example
, the scientists may discover new species that have benefits for humans because there are lots of life that can live in the cold
such
 as the South Pole. There are new opportunities for making money and hiring jobs from tourism that help an increased GDP of each country that have tours to the South Pole.
On the other hand
, some people believe that tourism and scientist produce the
pollution
 of the local life.
For instance
, if there are a lot of travelling to the South Pole, air
pollution
 from machines
such
 as helicopter or other vehicles, water
pollution
 from waste that human conduct will increase
as a result
 the local life get dangerous. To summarise, we cannot refuse to travel to the remote natural
environment
,
such
 as the South Pole because there are both advantages and disadvantages. Overall, it can be seen that we should travel or discover the new
environment
 carefully.
Moreover
, we cannot refuse to conduct
pollution but
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pollution, but
 we can decrease the
pollution
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pollution, such
such
 as we do not leave waste in the new
environment
.
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