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Some says that news has no connection with most people’s life and it is waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is claimed that spending time reading or watching the news is an absolute squander of time. In
this
 following essay, I would
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 that having access to the current state of affairs is of great importance to our daily life. To embark with, shaping good personal habits of reading news will bring massive advantages in keeping us well informed. Living in a fast-paced society, we need to remain updated about what all is going on around us. News are the barometers of the leading thoughts and trends across the globe, assist people's awareness of particular happenings and incidents,
therefore clear
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therefore, clear
 turmoil, prevent
misassumption
, and provide us with common understandings. Reading a wide range of categories
such
 as educations, economy, and politics will broaden our spectrum of knowledge and determine our actions toward various issues.
In
Suggestion
During
 the lockdown during the Corona Pandemic,
for example
, after reading and hearing news about the swelling infectious cases in their
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
, people can be
alert
Suggestion
alerted
 of the plight outside, and that information can keep them and their families safe.
Moreover
, newspapers play a vital role in mobilizing public opinion on various national issues. The news media focus the public’s attention on current problems, leading many people to form opinions about them. In
such
 a way, the press disseminates messages and educates the community in the right direction. By supplying us with updated information, they make us realize our responsibilities through our own honest opinions on various critical problems that our nation is facing. The press media can
also
 reinforce latent attitudes and activate them, prompting people to take action. They mirror the genuine sentiments among our fellows toward the ongoing state of affairs,
thus
 stimulation the public engagement in accomplishing our common goals. Overall, I would like to reaffirm that reading newspapers and watching news programs are the essential limbs of modern life.
Submitted by Thanh Nguyễn Minh on

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