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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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The Younger people nowadays are spending more of their free time in the shopping centre, whereas many individuals think that it has a negative effect for neighbourhoods as well as for them. I completely agree with that because spending huge point in shopping malls will affect their physical activity and they may be not able to contribute to the culture.
Firstly
, As the young generation will spend their free season in the supermarket,
then
 they may be unable to maintain their physical health, what I mean by
that is
 that they will not participate in any sports like football, soccer etc. In
this
 way they will become obese and health problems will be rise among them.
For example
, an article was published recently in Dawn news regarding youth where it was mentioned that 40% of them are suffering from dieses like obesity because of lack of physical activities.
Secondly
, when they will spend more day in the malls
then
 they cannot participate in the humanity welfare activates whereas population need younger people to serve it
such
 as a voluntary community centre.
such
Suggestion
Such
 as in Pakistan, where young people have to serve the local state for 2 years to go for higher education where it is mandatory. In
this
 way younger people will have experience of the public and they will learn how to be a good member of the civilized In conclusion, younger people need to spend less past at the shopping mall will be beneficial for them in term of their health as well as they can contribute more to the nation.
Submitted by Abdul Aziz Shaikh on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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