Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

It
is being discussed
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has been discussed
for several years that
wealthier countries
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the wealthier countries
have
responsibility
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a responsibility
responsibilities
the responsibility
to help poorer countries,
in particular
related
with
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to
food
availability and
education
. Some people believe that these are the government of poorer
nations
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nation's
obligation to secure their citizens
food
and
education
. In my point of view, the problems of the country are government
task but
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task, but
helping poorer countries to survive is a duty
for
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of
all nations. As we all know from the Heath Carter certificate that
food
and
education
are human rights which means all the people all over the world have the same chance to access them. Not only written on
human right certificate
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the human right certificate
, but
also
sustainability development goals program by United Nations prioritize to reduce hunger and increase
quality
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the quality
of
education
. It means that hunger and lack of
education
problems
are global problem
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are a global problem
which need help from wealthier countries.
In addition
, rich countries tend to have more prosperity
compare
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comparison
to developing
countries which
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countries, which
means these countries have more funding to support other countries. In example,
USA
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the USA
has a program called Peace
Corps which
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Corps, which
send a number of volunteers to be an English teacher in some rural areas in Africa and Asia. They
also has
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also have
have also had
are also having
agricultural fellowship program
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an agricultural fellowship program
agricultural fellowship programs
that has a goal to help farmers in Africa to cultivate a variety of plants which can serve adequate
food
production for the society. As can be
sum
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summed
up,
food
and
education
matters are
government
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a government
of the nation’s obligation, but these
matter
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matters
are
also
all nations concern so that all of the nation
need
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needs
to support each other.
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