At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of old people. Do the advantages of this situation outweight the disadvantages?

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Many countries now

habe

have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense

have

a large population of young people. While some people believe

this

is an advantageous, the others are about of the opinion that having the right mix of young and

old

Suggestion

older

people is essential for maintaining the proper balance.

This

essay will analyse both sides of the

agurement

the statement (oral or written) of an exchange of promises

agreement

before arriving at a reasoned conclusion There are certainly several benefits as having more young people.

To begin

with, young people are more

produtive

producing or capable of producing (especially abundantly)

productive

thn

conjunction used in comparatives

than

old people and healthier so

indutries

the people or companies engaged in a particular kind of commercial enterprise

industries

have no much difficulty finding the best talent.

Therefore

, companies are easier to looking for and recruit talent, enthusiasm people.

In addition

, young people can help to reduce burdens

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healthcare system

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the health care system

health care system

. Working population usually requires less

healthcare

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health care

services, it will contribute to community budgets of the governments.

On the other hand

, risk of sharp population will be growth and

large proportion

Suggestion

a large proportion

of productive age, it loads

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educational systems and children-rearing

serives

work done by one person or group that benefits another

service

Thus

rate

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the rate

of unemployment will be

rasing

the sport of engaging in contests of speed

racing

raising

rushing

, they will have to face a competition on job hunting and

also

accept a low-income. In conclusion, as I have mentioned above, the

advatanges

the quality of having a superior or more favorable position

advantages

of having

large number

Suggestion

a large number

large numbers

of young adults

can be outweight

Suggestion

can outweigh

can be outweigh

the disadvantages but there are significant points to consider.

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17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

205 words

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Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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demographic shift
workforce
economic growth
innovation
social evolution
curricula
health care costs
pension systems
mentorship
generational imbalance
unemployment
job markets
tax burden
adoption
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