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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of old people. Do the advantages of this situation outweight the disadvantages?

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Many countries now
habe
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
 a large population of young people. While some people believe
this
 is an advantageous, the others are about of the opinion that having the right mix of young and
old
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older
 people is essential for maintaining the proper balance.
This
 essay will analyse both sides of the
agurement
the statement (oral or written) of an exchange of promises
agreement
 before arriving at a reasoned conclusion There are certainly several benefits as having more young people.
To begin
 with, young people are more
produtive
producing or capable of producing (especially abundantly)
productive
thn
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 old people and healthier so
indutries
the people or companies engaged in a particular kind of commercial enterprise
industries
 have no much difficulty finding the best talent.
Therefore
, companies are easier to looking for and recruit talent, enthusiasm people.
In addition
, young people can help to reduce burdens
of
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on
healthcare system
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the health care system
health care system
. Working population usually requires less
healthcare
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health care
 services, it will contribute to community budgets of the governments.
On the other hand
, risk of sharp population will be growth and
large proportion
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a large proportion
 of productive age, it loads
to
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of
 educational systems and children-rearing
serives
work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
.
Thus
,
rate
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the rate
 of unemployment will be
rasing
the sport of engaging in contests of speed
racing
raising
rushing
, they will have to face a competition on job hunting and
also
 accept a low-income. In conclusion, as I have mentioned above, the
advatanges
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
 of having
large number
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a large number
large numbers
 of young adults
can be outweight
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can outweigh
can be outweigh
 the disadvantages but there are significant points to consider.
Submitted by Hoang Anh Thư Nguyễn on

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