It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A
child
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development
depends on various factors, like the things he is watching and the people he spends the time with. It is often argued that Use synonyms
media
, pop culture and Use synonyms
friends
play a significant Use synonyms
role
in the Use synonyms
child
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development
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while
others believe that family plays a vital Linking Words
role
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This
essay agrees that the Linking Words
media
and Use synonyms
friends
affect the Use synonyms
overall
growth of a Linking Words
child
.
Childhood is the only phase that moulds children towards positive or negative Use synonyms
development
and prepares them for the future. Nowadays, most Use synonyms
kids
spend their childhood in daycare centres, where they spend more than 8 hours with their Use synonyms
friends
. So, the thinking of his Use synonyms
friends
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as well as
the Linking Words
media
and the pop culture they follow, plays a significant Use synonyms
role
in his growth. Use synonyms
According to
the report from BBC, more than 70% of American youth want to become an artist just because they grew up watching them.
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However
, some advocates believe the family plays a significant Linking Words
role
in the Use synonyms
child
's Use synonyms
development
. Nowadays, people's lives have become so busy that they can barely spend a few hours with their Use synonyms
kids
; still, they pass the basic manners and culture to their children. There are many aspects of life, like ethics, good practices, and many cultural values that differentiate a person from being good or bad, that are learned by a Use synonyms
child
from the parents. Use synonyms
For instance
, Asian Linking Words
kids
have more respect towards their elders as compared to Western Use synonyms
kids
just because they spend more time with their families.
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To conclude
, Linking Words
media
and Use synonyms
friends
have their Use synonyms
role
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whereas
the family has its own towards a Linking Words
child
's Use synonyms
development
. In my opinion, as the world is getting more advanced and parents are getting busier, the Use synonyms
media
and Use synonyms
friends
influence a Use synonyms
child
more than their families.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Ensure that you have a clear position throughout the essay. The introduction should clearly present the two views and your opinion, making it consistent in the following paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesion and linking devices to connect ideas more clearly and improve the logical flow of the essay.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and details in your supporting paragraphs to adequately back up your points and to make your argument more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Work on a clear topic sentence for each paragraph to guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
A balanced discussion of both views is important. Try to expand on the role of the family and provide equally detailed examples and arguments as you have for media and friends.
coherence cohesion
Make sure the conclusion summarises your key points and reiterates your opinion without introducing new information.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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