in some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying both in and after school, and have less free time. do you think it has the positive and negative effects on children and society

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Nowadays, in many countries, youngsters are expected to take more
time
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in learning in and after school, their leisure
time
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should be limited.
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studying all
time
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has some
benefits but
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benefits, but
I think children do not have to do
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, they should balance both because having free
time
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also
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has positive effects. There are some benefits when children spend more
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in leisure
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.
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, free
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help
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helps
students decrease their stress level. To be more specific, if children have to study from morning to afternoon, they will overload with large knowledge and stress may form gradually which can affect them. To solve
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problem, they have to spend more
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in leisure
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to restore body and mind. Without a clear mind, not only students will get information from lessons slowly but
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their logical thinking
can not
can not
cannot
be optimal.
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, doing exercise and have enough nutrients to improve their health is another way to get a better result in studying. To put it simply, their health is good which supplies them enough energy to study for a long
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and they
can not
can not
cannot
under the weather
easily
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eased
. Gradually, they will adapt better with studying for a long
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if they play sports and decrease their stress.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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