Today, most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

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world, a new generation

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to create their own families when they reach thirty age, which was totally different in the past. I

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highly

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attitude in our new world, and I believe that the advantages of

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trend

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the drawbacks. In

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essay, I will explain

the

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both sides of

views

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and support my opinion as well. On one hand, a majority of

individuals'

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trend

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to have their own families, when they are thirties, as

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that certain age they almost completed their studies and started their business direction. Those abilities help them to be able to take the responsibility of having a family. Presently, both male and female

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been

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concept in life. As, they believe that

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a family requires lots of things,

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as having a house,

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job and sufficient money as well.

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Canada

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most

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individuals start to have a family when they have financial and social skills.

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, in the past people

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an easier life with

less challenge

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fewer challenges

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, which made them start their

family

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families

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earlier.

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, strong

relationship

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relationships

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between small

family

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and big

family

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families

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give great help to small, new

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, most of the ladies in the past were not working and in some regions not even go to school.

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reason, most of the family

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their children to get married earlier.

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, in18th century people used to start their

family

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families

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the

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twenties and

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lots of babies.

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, I think in our new

worlds

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it is so difficult to start

family

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a family

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before the thirties, because of all the responsibility and challenge people need to face now.

hala koraim

Jun 28, 2020

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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283 words

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