13. Many museums charge for admission, while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Some museums have
entrance
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an entrance fee
fee
while some of those do not have any
fee
to enter. I completely agree that it is advantageous to charge
admission
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an admission fee
admission fees
fee
than the disadvantage. Explanation of the opinion will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, every institution
require
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requires
revenue to run on
itself
the thing named or in question
it
. For
maintenance
and to pay salaries to employees serving in the museum definitely needs a source of income.
For example
, there are few heritage museums in cities of
India which
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India, which
are left alone without operating, due to the
chargeless
marked by lack of attention or consideration or forethought or thoroughness; not careful
careless
admissions to the visitors, it becomes
burden
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the burden
to
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of
the management to balance the
maintenance
of the museum and heavy inflow of people.
Hence
, it should self rely in terms of revenue,
maintenance
and development. On the other side, there will be a negative impact as well if the entrance is charged. The major theme of museums is to display the heritage and history
to
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of
the present generations along with recreation.
Hence
, people may opt for alternative choices available.
For example
, now-a-days people living in cities are reluctant to go physically to visit museums as they are preferably altering with cinemas,
shopping etc
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shopping, etc.
shopping etc.
for spending time and mobiles to browse history which saves visiting
fee
.
Therefore
, it might be a drawback with respect to attracting people to come out and visit. To conclude, disadvantages are shadowed by advantages in terms of managing.
Hence
, I completely agree to charge people who visit as it can revive itself for its
maintenance
and development even though few drawbacks exist.
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