With the development of online communication , people will never be alone and will always able to make new friends. To what extend do yo agree?

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People often prefer to communicate with each other trough online communication. Most people think
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is a very useful way
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life.I disagree with
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subject because people often get away from the family.
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a bad habit
bad habits
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people believe Very helpful because it
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time
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disadvantages
, people often get away from the family
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most people
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prefers
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causes little by little get away from each other.
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Moreover they
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feel lonely.
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Secondly, if
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has a problem No one can help.
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a
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lives with
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the family
they are Always supportive.
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, The
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has bad habits.
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, They try to be more alone because They think that all their needs are trough online communicate
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they become addicted.
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Because
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On the other hand
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other people believe very helpful because it
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saves
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time
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,
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people do not have to travel
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long distance to see
their family or parents.
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Secondly they
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Secondly, they
make new
friends other countries
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friends in other countries
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causes get to know
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the culture
a culture
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In my perspective online communicate can be both good and bad
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everything
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Everything
is balanced it can help each other
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